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Riff of a Quote from Calliope Writing

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The recent Blogoquent Competition calling for a description of life in a single sentence was won by Katrina, whose concise and eloquent entry posted in Calliope Writing struck me as being much like a haiku.  Hmmm.  One can indeed get a decent haiku by simply adding obbligato line breaks to the winning sentence:

Haiku Draft #1
|Life is a journey
|in which nothing is permanent and
|everything is precious.

While I do not freak out because this haiku breaks the 5-7-5 Rule and lacks a clear fragment/phrase boundary, I believe that rule violations need better reasons than

That’s what popped into my head.

The competition is over.  We are free to use 2 sentences now.  A better haiku emerges:

Haiku Draft #2
|Life is a journey.
|No things are permanent and
|all things are precious.

Hmmm.  Do I have an image to illustrate this post?  I do, and it suggests another tweak:

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Happy Heraclitus
|Life flows and splashes.
|No things are permanent and
|all things are precious.

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8 thoughts on “Riff of a Quote from Calliope Writing

    1. Good guess, but obbligato in Italian is more like “obligatory” in English.  Imported into English for music, it means that the notes in a part are written out by the composer just as they are to be played, with very little room for the performer to improvise.  So I used it to describe line breaks that are specified by the author rather than mostly left up to the proximity of the right margin.  A lot of “blank verse” is really prose with obbligato line breaks.  OK with me, if it’s good prose.

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  1. Beautiful what inspires us! Loved this post and your haiku tweaking.

    You inspired me to tweak one of Heraclitus’ quote:

    No river is stepped
    twice by a man for it’s not
    same river; nor man.

    Original quote: “No man ever steps in the same river twice, for it’s not the same river and he’s not the same man.”

    I haven’t forgotten our third haiku project. It may be another week before I can get to it. It’s the one about children; a very fine one, in fact. I do like the idea about the trail. I’ll shut my mouth now. 😀

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