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Another Maple Seed Haiku

This post responds to a CDHK challenge by sharing two haiku about seeing maples consign their seeds to the warm wind: my own and one written by Betty Hayes Albright.
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In response to CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI: Carpe Diem Utabukuro #10 Wim Lofvers’ “a maple seed”

In late May of 2015 I happened to be out walking on a perfect day for seeing maples consign their seeds to the warm wind.  Having neither the skill nor the equipment to capture the moment on video, I kept walking and composed an appropriate haiku.

I like to use a haiku to wrap up a discussion that not even Basho could fit into 3 lines.  Having no more to say at that time, I typed the haiku into my computer and left it there.  Now I have a CDHK opportunity for my haiku.  As of this writing, there are 9 responses posted.  From a wealth of good haiku about maple seeds, I will share as a favorite the same favorite (written by Betty Hayes Albright) that is shared in the 5-th response.

Albright’s haiku stands out for me because it is vivid and reads quite naturally as English w/o any apology for squeezing into 5-7-5.  It also uses ordinary capitalization and punctuation, which I prefer over the affectations common in poetry.  At the risk of shooting myself in the foot, I will display it alongside my own haiku at the end of this post.

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© Betty Hayes Albright

The air is spinning!
Squadrons of maple-copters
take the fertile earth.

Seize the Breeze

Helicopter seeds
fall from maples and travel
far enough, this once.

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